Authors, let’s just admit it. We’re insecure.
Writing is communication and we want to make sure that our readers are getting what we’re putting down (Translation: Understanding what we’re saying).
So, what do we do?
And that over-explaining slows down our pacing and makes our reader not want to read anymore.
There are lots of bigger ways of overexplaining.
And what is overexplaining? It’s when you just keep adding things on to make your reader get what you’re saying.
Shaun punched the wall. He was so angry he could spit. His hands clenched into tight fists. “What kind of butthead are you?” he roared.
So, all four of those sentences tell us the same thing.
Shaun is angry.
You can cut down that to one or two and the reader is still going to get it. Trust the reader’s brains. Trust yourself.
Here’s a rewrite.
Shaun punched the wall. “What kind of butthead are you?”
But it’s not just in long passages that us writer people do this. We do it in short bits too.
Here are some big ones.
She shrugged her shoulders. (She shrugged)
He nodded his head in agreement. (He nodded) or (He agreed)
They shook their head no. (They shook their head)
He looked at his watch to check the time. (He checked the time)
Other things we do is
Tell something that we just showed. (Shaun punched the wall. He was so angry.)
Add in a dialogue tag that we don’t need, (the she said/they asked) when we don’t need it.
Add in silly adverbs that we don’t need.
Add in a bunch of statements all saying the same thing. (See that original example).
Acting like the reader is stupid. (Of course we know the person is nodding their head. We don’t think they are nodding their butt.)
When you do this over-explaining thing you:
- Slow down the pace
- Ruin the subtext.
- Break my heart.
- Make the scenes dull. Over-explaining takes out the pizzazz.
- It takes away the immediacy and the forward motion of the plot and scene.
WRITING TIP OF THE POD
Be all one and done, people. Trust the reader to get it. Trust your skills to communicate well.
DOG TIP FOR LIFE.
If you want a treat, sit in front of the pantry and drool on the floor.
LINKS WE TALK ABOUT IN THE PODCAST
The music we’ve clipped and shortened in this podcast is awesome and is made available through the Creative Commons License.
Here’s a link to that and the artist’s website. Who is this artist and what is this song? It’s “Summer Spliff” by Broke For Free.
AND we have a writing tips podcast called WRITE BETTER NOW! It’s taking a bit of a hiatus, but there are a ton of tips over there.
We have a podcast, LOVING THE STRANGE, which we stream biweekly live on Carrie’s Facebook and Twitter and YouTube on Fridays. Her Facebook and Twitter handles are all carriejonesbooks or carriejonesbook. But she also has extra cool content focused on writing tips here.
Carrie is reading one of her raw poems every once in awhile on CARRIE DOES POEMS. And there you go! Whew! That’s a lot!